I'd love to read that - sincerely enjoy your writing style!dblitz » July 4th, 2017, 4:35 am wrote:I will try to think up a story with a plot based on media fakery.

I'd love to read that - sincerely enjoy your writing style!dblitz » July 4th, 2017, 4:35 am wrote:I will try to think up a story with a plot based on media fakery.
Very enjoyable.dblitz » 03 Jul 2017, 21:04 wrote:I just found this old story I wrote, around 2005 or 6. It has some space elements that some may disagree with, and maybe I would write it differently now, but the plot is the main thing. I would appreciate feedback as I am getting back into writing and I might even re-write this since it was a while ago now and I have an alternative ending in mind.
https://dblitzblog.blogspot.com.au/2017 ... ution.html
I only just read the story today. I also like the style. You have a knack for building tension. Don´t bother about changing it to reconcile it with your current knowledge (a never-ending task)! It´ll probably show if you do and, as you say, the plot is the main thing. It could use a tiny bit of proof-reading, though.dblitz » July 3rd, 2017, 4:04 pm wrote:I just found this old story I wrote, around 2005 or 6. It has some space elements that some may disagree with, and maybe I would write it differently now, but the plot is the main thing. I would appreciate feedback as I am getting back into writing and I might even re-write this since it was a while ago now and I have an alternative ending in mind.
I'd say this is related to fakery promoting bad science. Hence it may belong here in our Art Corner. I am amused by your concept of planets going around the sun in a narrative within a narrative within a narrative such that the exploration of the context of that thought has more to do with the feeling behind it rather than any factuality. Yet the feeling honors true factuality by remaining ambiguous and non-committed to an idea. To me, anyway. I don't have to try hard to read it this way but that might be my bias. Anyway, great structure and technique!Kassie wrote:Dark Energy
pained him. He knew æther when he saw it,
watched theory take a cure-all
to smooth out the night, patching
up physics by tradition and verse, familiar
hearthside legends, while he ran
with the toothed unknown,
the untamed science replete
with attributes more rich unnamed,
more honest, in a time when honest work was rare.
But æther came at dusk, swinging
its toolbox, whistling worksong.
Old jack-of-all-trades:
rough-handed, stead-sure, employed
to do what a certified labourer couldn't –
to push planets around the sun, carry
light across the cosmos, or make
the Universe expand;
in other words, he'd concede,
a man in need of home, love, supper,
and life apart from anonymity.
Thanks!hoi.polloi » April 13th, 2018, 1:07 am wrote:That's a pretty good mashup! Hysterical!